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Storm - a Haiku.

Storm - a Haiku

Oppressive, airless.
Thunder Goblins ride the clouds,
Dark approaching storm.

Rumbling and grumbling,
threatening, circling nearer.
Dark approaching storm.

© July 2021
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04-07-2021, 06:55 PM
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Oooh this is good! Loving the Thunder Goblins!
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04-07-2021, 06:59 PM
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Thank you!
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05-07-2021, 08:40 AM
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I like the idea of Thunder Goblins as well. It's very evocative.
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05-07-2021, 09:08 AM
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Originally Posted by Fruitcake ->
I like the idea of Thunder Goblins as well. It's very evocative.
Yes, evocative, that's the word! Lovely Haiku Tabby
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05-07-2021, 09:14 AM
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Thank you all very much - sometimes I just need the discipline of Haiku.
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05-07-2021, 09:35 AM
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Re: Storm - a Haiku.

Originally Posted by Silver Tabby ->
Storm - a Haiku

Oppressive, airless.
Thunder Goblins ride the clouds,
Dark approaching storm.

Rumbling and grumbling,
threatening, circling nearer.
Dark approaching storm.

© July 2021


this is brilliant, I could almost hear the thunder through your words..

I hope you don't mind me encroaching on your thread.

Here is my Haiku of what I need

Liberating air
Smiling fairies kicking clouds away,
Light approaching sunshine

Pleasing and warm
teasing, radiating rays
Light approaching sunshine
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05-07-2021, 09:37 AM
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Very good Tabs.
I can 'see' the storm coming.


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05-07-2021, 09:38 AM
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I love thunder storms

Very descriptive
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Re: Storm - a Haiku.

Originally Posted by Lion Queen ->


I hope you don't mind me encroaching on your thread.
You are most welcome.

Here is my Haiku of what I need

Liberating air
Smiling fairies kicking clouds away, (19)
Light approaching sunshine (6)

Pleasing and warm (4)
teasing, radiating rays
Light approaching sunshine (6)
A lovely counterpoint to mine! Thank you.


Being pedantic though -
verse one - lines 2 & 3 - too many syllables.
Verse two - line 1 - not enough syllables
line 3 - too many.

Should be 5, 7, 5.
 
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