13-10-2013, 10:29 PM
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Re: A Poem-"The Over 50's Forum"
Originally Posted by Twizard
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I can not write a poem,I can not write a rhyme.
I can not write a novel
'cos I just don't have the time!
So I'll write a little song,
A little lullaby.
It's just a little ditty
And isn't very long.
(You'll have to imagine it 'cos I used up my allowance
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That little eight liner is brilliant,perfect really,you had just enough room to say what you wanted,the reason i made it eight lines was specifically to force contributors to rhyme.
It works,any longer and it gets pedantic,any shorter and it just does not quite do it,but eight lines i worked out was optimum length.
Your verse is perfect.Thank You.
Billy
13-10-2013, 10:35 PM
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Re: A Poem-"The Over 50's Forum"
Originally Posted by billsteamshovel
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Am I in the Over 50's Forum? or have i been super teleported to the bloody Dementia Forum,8 lines each or it just upsets the flow,there are a thousand places here to post your personal stuff,so stick to the rules of the thread,i based the rules on the percieved IQ of the members,an aggregate,I was wrong,I should of lowered the "I don't understand bar"!Billy
13-10-2013, 10:41 PM
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Re: A Poem-"The Over 50's Forum"
I like a littly ditty TwizI can hum along just fine
I think your such a whiz to think of it
and boy does it save time
only 4 more lines to go then I'll have a little rhyme
together with my ditty Twiz
this work will all be mine
I wish I was a poet who could write in verse all day
about this and that and t'other but I can't so I'll quietly fade away.
Good one Twiz this is a comment not to be confused with attempted poem.
13-10-2013, 11:18 PM
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Re: A Poem-"The Over 50's Forum"
No 'mob' are we nor 'fossils' neither,but genuine folk who like a natter.
We give support to those who want it
and share wise words with care and a keen wit.
We don’t like rude or aggressive people,
the hand of friendship is extended to the reasonable,
Members come and members go,
the ones who stay are honest and true.
13-10-2013, 11:24 PM
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Re: A Poem-"The Over 50's Forum"
Originally Posted by Mags
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Billy, we have the same problem with forum rules ..... some people tend to ignore them
All i have tried to do here Mags is get some of the quieter members to try something new with their brains,anyone can make words rhyme,but people get put off by the more "in your face" members and do not contribute as much as they would like,not everyone is "out there" and personality plus,some members need a filip,this is what i tried to do,get people to exercise their brains in a different way,think outside the square,dare to "shoot off on a tangent",just trying to "coax" the inner expression out of people,its there in all of us,I just wanted the quieter members to do something outside their comfort zone,for a change,I just wanted them to write an 8 line verse and see what it feels like for others to say to them "Well Done""
Billy
13-10-2013, 11:34 PM
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Re: A Poem-"The Over 50's Forum"
Originally Posted by billsteamshovel
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All i have tried to do here Mags is get some of the quieter members to try something new with their brains,anyone can make words rhyme,but people get put off by the more "in your face" members and do not contribute as much as they would like,not everyone is "out there" and personality plus,some members need a filip,this is what i tried to do,get people to exercise their brains in a different way,think outside the square,dare to "shoot off on a tangent",just trying to "coax" the inner expression out of people,its there in all of us,I just wanted the quieter members to do something outside their comfort zone,for a change,I just wanted them to write an 8 line verse and see what it feels like for others to say to them "Well Done"" Billy
I would probably need a whole page to make sense of my poem!
14-10-2013, 09:48 AM
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Re: A Poem-"The Over 50's Forum"
Originally Posted by billsteamshovel
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You can bugger off thank you,keep your comments civil,i was barred for less!
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